Just in 5 chapters and this are what I find problematic:
1)lack of realistic solutions: adding more wood to the fire or sleeping closer to it are far more sensible and safe options than sharing a bed with a stranger, ESPECIALLY given the traumatic experience the MC just endured. The lack of realistic alternatives makes the sleeping together “solution” feel contrived.
2)the man’s internal thoughts about not wanting to deal with a corpse are incredibly callous and don’t make him a sympathetic character. Even if this were his true motivation (which is highly problematic in itself), it’s not a justification he’d share, and it doesn’t reflect genuine concern for the MC’s well-being.
3)the “this is my first time” admission feels like a clumsy attempt to add depth to the character, but it comes across as inconsistent and undermines any potential emotional resonance. It’s as if the author is trying to create a romantic moment but fails to establish any genuine connection between them first.
4)the situation completely disregards the trauma the MC has experienced. Sharing a bed with a stranger after such an event is incredibly unlikely, and the author’s handling of this aspect is insensitive and even potentially triggering for some readers. Especially ones that experienced being assaulted.
The scene feels poorly written and doesn’t ring true. It relies on tropes and shortcuts rather than building a believable story. Tsk tsk. Very disappointed
Eulahh
Just in 5 chapters and this are what I find problematic:
1)lack of realistic solutions: adding more wood to the fire or sleeping closer to it are far more sensible and safe options than sharing a bed with a stranger, ESPECIALLY given the traumatic experience the MC just endured. The lack of realistic alternatives makes the sleeping together “solution” feel contrived.
2)the man’s internal thoughts about not wanting to deal with a corpse are incredibly callous and don’t make him a sympathetic character. Even if this were his true motivation (which is highly problematic in itself), it’s not a justification he’d share, and it doesn’t reflect genuine concern for the MC’s well-being.
3)the “this is my first time” admission feels like a clumsy attempt to add depth to the character, but it comes across as inconsistent and undermines any potential emotional resonance. It’s as if the author is trying to create a romantic moment but fails to establish any genuine connection between them first.
4)the situation completely disregards the trauma the MC has experienced. Sharing a bed with a stranger after such an event is incredibly unlikely, and the author’s handling of this aspect is insensitive and even potentially triggering for some readers. Especially ones that experienced being assaulted.
The scene feels poorly written and doesn’t ring true. It relies on tropes and shortcuts rather than building a believable story. Tsk tsk. Very disappointed